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Sugar is high-quality software for ~~children to learn~~ with~~, especially~~ younger children.

Sugar is high-quality software for learning with a special focus on the needs of younger children.

Sugar is designed for use with or without direct internet access, ~~as most of the world's~~ children do not have regular or reliable internet access ~~yet~~.

Sugar is designed for use with or without direct internet access, so it can be used by children do not yet have regular or reliable internet access.

Sugar runs on inexpensive desktop and laptop computers~~, and~~ a web based version is under development for tablets and phones.

The Sugar desktop runs on inexpensive desktop and laptop computers; a web-based version is under development for tablets and phones.

Sugar Activities are ~~programs~~ that encourage learning through self-discovery and encourage collaboration, expression, and reflection.

Sugar Activities are applications that run in the Sugar desktop and/or on the web. Sugar Activities encourage learning through self-discovery and encourage collaboration, expression, and reflection.

Every Activity respects every user's freedom to run, study, modify and redistribute it using software licenses compatible with the GNU General Public License (GPL) ~~version~~ 3 or later.

Every Sugar Activity respects every user's freedom to run, study, modify and redistribute it using software licenses compatible with the GNU General Public License (GPL) Version 3 or later.

Sugar began in 2006 as part of the One Laptop ~~Per~~ Child (OLPC) project.

Sugar development began in 2006 as part of the One Laptop per Child (OLPC) project.

In 2016, the Sugar community is global~~, and~~ we aspire to include users and contributors in all countries, all languages, and all cultures.

In 2016, the Sugar community is global; we aspire to include users and contributors in all countries, all languages, and all cultures.

We are Sugar Labs, a volunteer-led and non-profit organization in service to the Sugar community.

We facilitate knowledge and software sharing ~~across~~ all ~~continents, and~~ relate the software freedom movement to education.

We facilitate knowledge and software sharing among all people; we relate the software freedom movement to education.

We raise funds and use them to accelerate our Members~~' progress~~, enabling access to laptops, travel, and more.

We raise funds and use them to accelerate the progress of our Members, enabling their access to laptops, travel, and more.

We make things to think with. Join us.

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-Sugar is high-quality software for children to learn with, especially younger children.
+Sugar is high-quality software for learning with a special focus on the needs of younger children.
-Sugar is designed for use with or without direct internet access, as most of the world's children do not have regular or reliable internet access yet.
+Sugar is designed for use with or without direct internet access, so it can be used by children do not yet have regular or reliable internet access.
-Sugar runs on inexpensive desktop and laptop computers, and a web based version is under development for tablets and phones.
+The Sugar desktop runs on inexpensive desktop and laptop computers; a web-based version is under development for tablets and phones.
-Sugar Activities are programs that encourage learning through self-discovery and encourage collaboration, expression, and reflection.
+Sugar Activities are applications that run in the Sugar desktop and/or on the web. Sugar Activities encourage learning through self-discovery and encourage collaboration, expression, and reflection.
-Every Activity respects every user's freedom to run, study, modify and redistribute it using software licenses compatible with the GNU General Public License (GPL) version 3 or later.
+Every Sugar Activity respects every user's freedom to run, study, modify and redistribute it using software licenses compatible with the GNU General Public License (GPL) Version 3 or later.
-Sugar began in 2006 as part of the One Laptop Per Child (OLPC) project.
+Sugar development began in 2006 as part of the One Laptop per Child (OLPC) project.
-In 2016, the Sugar community is global, and we aspire to include users and contributors in all countries, all languages, and all cultures.
+In 2016, the Sugar community is global; we aspire to include users and contributors in all countries, all languages, and all cultures.
 We are Sugar Labs, a volunteer-led and non-profit organization in service to the Sugar community.
-We facilitate knowledge and software sharing across all continents, and relate the software freedom movement to education.
+We facilitate knowledge and software sharing among all people; we relate the software freedom movement to education.
-We raise funds and use them to accelerate our Members' progress, enabling access to laptops, travel, and more.
+We raise funds and use them to accelerate the progress of our Members, enabling their access to laptops, travel, and more.
 We make things to think with. Join us.