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Sugar is high-quality software for learning ~~with a special focus on the needs of~~ younger children.

Sugar is high-quality software for learning, especially by younger children.

Sugar is designed for use ~~with or without direct internet access, so it can be used~~ by ~~children~~ who do not yet have regular or reliable internet access.

Sugar is designed for use by people who do not yet have regular or reliable internet access.

The Sugar ~~desktop~~ runs on inexpensive desktop and laptop computers that have modest capacity; a web-based version is under development for tablets and phones.

The Sugar Desktop runs on inexpensive desktop and laptop computers that have modest capacity; a web-based version is under development for tablets and phones called Sugarizer.

Sugar Activities are applications that run in the Sugar ~~desktop and/~~or ~~on the web~~. Sugar Activities encourage learning through self-discovery and encourage collaboration, expression, and reflection.

Sugar Activities are applications that run in the Sugar Desktop or Sugarizer. Sugar Activities encourage learning through self-discovery and encourage collaboration, expression, and reflection.

Every Sugar Activity respects every user's freedom to run, study, modify and redistribute it using software licenses compatible with the GNU General Public License (GPL) Version 3 or later.

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We facilitate knowledge and software sharing among all people; we relate the software freedom movement to education.

We raise funds and use them to accelerate the progress of our Members, enabling ~~their~~ access to laptops, travel, and more.

We raise funds and use them to accelerate the progress of our Members, enabling them to access laptops, travel, and more.

We make things to think with. Join us.

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-Sugar is high-quality software for learning with a special focus on the needs of younger children.
+Sugar is high-quality software for learning, especially by younger children.
-Sugar is designed for use with or without direct internet access, so it can be used by children who do not yet have regular or reliable internet access.
+Sugar is designed for use by people who do not yet have regular or reliable internet access.
-The Sugar desktop runs on inexpensive desktop and laptop computers that have modest capacity; a web-based version is under development for tablets and phones.
+The Sugar Desktop runs on inexpensive desktop and laptop computers that have modest capacity; a web-based version is under development for tablets and phones called Sugarizer.
-Sugar Activities are applications that run in the Sugar desktop and/or on the web. Sugar Activities encourage learning through self-discovery and encourage collaboration, expression, and reflection.
+Sugar Activities are applications that run in the Sugar Desktop or Sugarizer. Sugar Activities encourage learning through self-discovery and encourage collaboration, expression, and reflection.
 Every Sugar Activity respects every user's freedom to run, study, modify and redistribute it using software licenses compatible with the GNU General Public License (GPL) Version 3 or later.
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 We facilitate knowledge and software sharing among all people; we relate the software freedom movement to education.
-We raise funds and use them to accelerate the progress of our Members, enabling their access to laptops, travel, and more.
+We raise funds and use them to accelerate the progress of our Members, enabling them to access laptops, travel, and more.
 We make things to think with. Join us.